Writing Thread.

This one’s for the people who (aside from uni’ing) enjoy writing as a hobby.

Post short stories/poems and anything else you’ve written or enjoy reading (but give credit to the author.)
Constructively critique people’s writing.
Discuss writers and poems.
Just have fun.

I’ll get the ball rolling by posting a poem a wrote a few months back.

A place called home.

The buzz of flourescent lights.
The tapping of pens and pencils.
The heat radiating from corpses.
In this place that some call, home.

The rattle of the warden’s keys.
The idle chatter between inmates.
The cold, seeping from my cell.
In this place called, prison.

The bitter taste from the pills.
The cramped room, with a small window.
The pale nurse, who brings me food.
In this place called, the asylum.

The vibrant colors of fictional birds.
The soft grass, serving as a bed.
The solace I take, from our tangible world.
In this place, that I call, home.

TALK!

I like it! I write mostly jazz poetry and avant-garde stream of conciousnes poetry…

Another Shatter

I told you before, it didn’t matter, untill I cryed that you were pulling me down through these tarnished hopes and wishes back to where we started. At nowhere, I paused for breath and you told me to let you go but I held on too hard and you just fell, and fell, and fell.

I stood by myself, not knowing, never blinking and I started. looking at you fall down, and down, and down untill you were quite all on the ground.

(Taking it all in over a Stevens County sunset)

I had to scream to be heard over the rain. It poured down on the concrete like arrows fresh from Orion’s bow, sucking into a pigeon’s heart and letting it fall into a million bloody pieces" I yelled. Still no reply, no head turning as your heart got eaten by twenty small animals. Removing the blood from their lips, they sat there (some standing) and they looked at me with an air of disdane and frustration like I didn’t already know. But I had no clue what they were talking about as they skurttled themselvesby their toes into an oblivion, set off limits by the Marshall who sings half forgotton songs to a deaf woman in hopes of winning her over. He spat part of his soul at her feet but she hardly noticed.

(Such are these times we are living in that have already been forgotten)

A harlot now apears and strolls down the gravel pathway in the garden. I blow a kiss to her and smile and she spits at me. I tried to aproach her and she swung sorrowed, talloned hands at me. I ran at her, knocking her over and down and into the river. Her hair became like wisps of singed grass in the coldness. We stodd in full view, staring each other in the face silent. Her, she was wet and deranged in the mucky scum in the water, I, I had pushed her, looking from the bank. (Not triumphant at all). I helped her climb out. We walked down the highway again. Cars and Trucks swinging madly every direction around us. She didn’t whisper a single word. My heart was tearing itself up because of the scilence, and she knew. I walked on the highway with the woman who hated me. No talking, no looking.

I told her that it wasn’t far to Akron. She told me we’d left Akron miles ago. Now the only way to return was to come back to where we started, in the snowy fields when I was trapped under the roots of a tree.

Trapped like a rock under water.

She came and straightend the roots with her hands that looked like grass. And finally, I could only think to say:

“Did you know that your hands look like they’re made out of grass?”

Good idea. Here’s something.

I spent a lifetime writing commercials for privately-owned radio stations.

It was good training in getting to a point in thirty seconds. (That’s eighty words, unless it is manipulated digitally, but I am old school.)

My point is that because of my work, I came to haiku. Compression of language.

“Breeze scatters rose petals in my path.
For an instant,
I am Caesar.”

Best from the right coast of Canada, where there are always rose petals in our paths,lemon slices and butter for the lobster.
william

I like to write poems but I usualy only think about writing them when I am down, so there not exactly happy lol. I also don’t usually type them up, but these two I have typed up. (I think I typed them up to be sent to a friend or something like that)

This one doesn’t have a title

Side by side
She faces all her fears
Looking at a mirror
She wipes away the tears

Thousands of questions
Running through her head
Her eyes begin to droop
As her body calls for bed

Slapping her face
To keep from falling asleep
Shivering at her nightmares
She falls and begins to weep

Lying to herself
She says it’s all ok
Knowing that the truth will return
And haunt her again some day

Looking out the window
She wishes to run away
To find her place of heaven
And one day go to stay

This one doesn’t have a title as well.

Do you know who I am
Of my fears and of my hopes?
Do you know what I wish for
Or what I long for the most?

If I tell you of my present
Will you ask about my past?
If I disclose to you my secrets
How long like that will they last?

Would you like to know the real me
Or the fake one that I display?
Would you like to know what I stand for
And what scares me everyday?

If all of this I give to you
In return what will I receive?
If I put my hope and trust in you
Can I pray you’ll never leave?

Once you get to know me
Will you think it was a waste?
Once you find someone better
Will they just take my place?

So what’s the point of trying
If all will end in vain?
So why should I even bother
If I’ll just end up in pain?

Constructive criticism is invited :wink:

Not much criticism sprida, but just wanted to say that I can really connect to that second one, good job.

The Tree of Hate

You tear at the flesh, how easily it tears.
The tears soak into your paper skin.
So frail, so weak, rest wary.

They crawl into your gash, a new home.
The seeds of hate root deep into your chest.
But those seeds were already there.

Tears, blood, pus oozing and seeping.
This could have been avoided, but no.
You waited for it, embraced the pain.

Spreading, the tree grows, feeding on you.
Oh how it hurts, but you love it.
You think you warrant this agony.

Tapping deep into the heart, it spreads.
Septic roots slowly engulf you.
Tell me how you watch this happen?

Slowly withering, you watch it grow.
Chopping the trunk is merely aesthetic.
Pull these roots and burn the seeds.

You now face two choices:
Be the soil of the Tree of Hate,
Or face no rooted sepulchre.

Choose.

Wrote this one after endlessly watching my best friend suffer in silence.

In addition to presenting and doing production, I"ve now been roped in as copy writer as well.
I do love how inventive you become when you have to start trimming words.
Looking for one that’ll carry the meaning of three.
It’s very good fun.

Maybe people are speaking slower now, but I work on 75 words.

i am a happy person who writes poems like edgar allan poe poems about death

Earthquake
i walk the streets of san andres on what seems to be an average day
the ground starts at a tremble thn grows to a vigorous vibration
blood curdling screams fill the air
skyscrapers once a symbol of power and wealth crumble like a man, shot
the world seems to be spinning, it is asthough i’m being swallowed by hell
slowly fall back into na endless abyss:(

I enjoy writing as a hobby, but i do it in all the OTHER threads here.

Well… Ummm I don’t normally share my writing but I’ve got some I’ve shown to others, because they asked to see them… I’m not very good though… I’ll just link to some google docs instead of posting all of them in whole here…

Sleepless Nights
Purpose
Old Man Winter
Late Night Bombing raids
Places Narrative
What was the sky like when you were young?
Glassy Eyed Majesty
Flit(Façade)
The Addiction

EDIT: these were all written in the last year.

i wrote this about 2 years ago

The hunt

James woke up to the sound of distant thunder and the sensation of rain on his face .James was 16 years old around 6 feet, and had black hair
“Rain” thought James. It hadn’t rained in Bay of Rogues for 1 month now. As James worked his way out of his sleeping bag a pine cone fell on his head “bloody things’ thought James as it was the fourth it had happened this camp. It was a school trip James was on, James never enjoyed school trips it was always to much work for to little reward .when James was out of his sleeping bag his noticed all the other people slowly stir and become aware of their situation
“What’s happening “yelled Eugene
“it’s raining idiot!” James yelled back .As the whole class crawled out of their tents Sleeping bags and the such there was an eerie moan, James saw a chill creep down the whole class’ back including Mr Roden, who the a self-proclaimed tough man, James saw this as unusual as it had never happened before, but James disregarded it and thought it was just the cold getting to everyone. While every one was trying to get shelter under the large eucalyptus tree some thing was watching them, eyeing them with hungry eyes it stood deathly still “.And then she sat on a turtle!” Eugene joked.
A rustle was the only thing that gave a warning to its position ; it pounced ,James had heard the rustle and had his hunting knife at the ready ,it soared over James ,he saw the big shaggy mane flying effortlessly overhead .James thrusted his knife upwards through the things under belly ,its body spilling blood all over James, the silhouette hit the ground with a deathly slump ,James fainted.

Wake up

The environment, in which James was awoken in, was a bland, white and sterile environment. he heard beeps and blips of some unknown device .James propped himself into a sitting position on his bed and saw plate glass windows outside his self contained ward ,there was plastic draped over his bed and there was just enough room for him to move
“What’s happening!?” James yelled,not sure who he was yelling to, a small amount of static was heard and James turned to the left to see a small speaker ,more static came out of it and something of a female voice came out “we’re quarantining you”. ”quarantine?” James thought.

Dan! you didn’t finish the story! FINISH THE STORY! you left us hanging!!!

I used to do a bit of forum roleplaying several years back. I started the most successful roleplaying thread on the EQOA forums (which, back then, were pretty heavily trafficked, not so much any more). Can’t find it now, it’s buried under years of other posts on there. Those were good times, though…I like writing combat-oriented fantasy type stuff.

yeah i know,but i had stuff to do,i might do it later

stuff to do… for two years!! busy busy.

i write.
am working on new piece ‘write’ now.

I dont mean no shame, i dont mean no pain
Cause i dont wanna play the game
I dont wanna wait, i cant stand to debate
and for that, you better look back
find yourself, where you once were at
reclaim yourself, find the fame
the shame instilled, from other desire
doesnt add up, it doesnt fuel the fire
dont argue, it’ll just hurt you
cause when i come back, its gonna be you
you the person, you the enemy,
you the person, who just wont leave me
alone on my own, to find what you wont lone
just a thought, that ive forgot
and in the light, see if you might
but ive got no shame, and i mean no pain
without the two, youve got no fame

Wow. That actually looks good. I just wrote it up in 3 seconds in here. Coolio i guess. By the way, i write music a bit, some lyrics. This might turn into a verse of a rap/hip hop song i’ll write up.

bumping this thread because I don’t want it to die…

Then post some more of your stuff!!! you’re a genious… if you didn’t know…

fine I’ll post more… I was hoping that more people would actually post what they’ve written… but here’s two new pieces… not very good at all though…

“Again”
“This Friend”

Not very gooooodddddddddddd…!!! Those are wonderful!!!
The last one reminds me of you. :slight_smile:

Okay… so I’m not sure what I think of this…

I like this better.